How to Write a Band 9 IELTS Essay

UK 50%

SINGAPORE 34

DUBAI 7

JAPAN 3 BRAZIL 6

Band 5

50% of passengers are from the Uk.

The passengers from Singapore are 34 percent of the total number.

Firstly, we change verb (are)

to represent

to account for

to make up

Band 6

Britons represent 50% of all passengers.

The Singaporeans  account for 34% of the total number.

Tourists from, Dubai, Japan and Brazil make up the remaining 16% of the people on board.

 Percentage repeat

20% – 1/5

every fifth passenger

one passenger out of five

Band 7

Britons represent half of all passengers.

The Singapore  account for over one third of the total number.

Nationalities

People from UK  –  the British people

or the British

or Britons

Band 9

The UK is the largest cruise market, with Britons representing over half of all passengers.